This is an authentic student’s response for a letter writing question about losing something small, but valuable. Despite occasional clumsy language and a few register errors, overall, this is a strong piece of writing which fits to the higher mark bands. In order to further improve the letter, she could have explained how the purse was lost, and perhaps, a purse is not the best choice for “something small”! We hope you enjoy reading this. If you want us to publish your work, send them over to admin@eslmojo.com. We will review and publish them with our comments!
Dear Adele,
How’s everything at your end? I hope you’re in the pink of health. Some unfavourable events cropped up recently, and I wanted to keep you updated on my side.
I’m sure you’d get a panic attack hearing this. So, I wanted you to prepare yourself first, before reading any further. The thing is that, I lost the purse you asked me to deliver to your Aunt Marie. I promise I was very careful and kept it safely with me, in my handbag, but I just wasn’t able to find it anywhere after I got off at Hulhumale, from the ferry last night.
You know very well that I’d not leave a stone unturned and wouldn’t stop searching, as I know how much you valued it. I immediately got back onto the ferry and searched every nook and corner of the boat, but no luck finding it. I even asked my friend back in Male’ to search the route through which I reached the terminal.
I’ve been down in the dumps since I lost the purse. I couldn’t even bring myself to tell you the bitter truth. I’ve got some good news to cheer you up though. I’ve found an identical, purse at a shop here and I’m gifting this to your aunt on your behalf, as part of the responsibility I have to take.
I’ve got to dash now. I hope to hear from you in the not too distant future. Send my regards to baby Ann and Micheal.
With love,
Ruuya
About the author:
Ruuya is currently studying in grade 10 at Iskandhar School. She has already done First Language English and secured an A grade.